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Resolution
Contributed by
MaryAnson
on
Monday, 30th November 2009 @ 01:36:57 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Shame, which never should have been
my own. It stung and wounded me.
Loathsome, spiteful and obscene.
A mistake of the anatomy.
Pain, which cut beneath the skin
at thoughts of a flaw to never leave.
It formed the tidal wave within;
created refusal to believe.
Envy, of those free of this
which seemed to hinder all to come.
Thought of those who lived in bliss
made me feel inane and numb.
Fear, which made both my eyes shine.
Could anybody comprehend
this feature in my design?
My only choice was to pretend.
Frustration, seeing others touch
so freely, and knowing that, me;
I could not be tactile as much.
For revulsion was a guarantee.
Isolation, restriction and
such sadness also plagued my mind.
Until a solution crossed my hands
And let me leave such grief behind.
Gratitude, and happiness
have replaced those emotions so bleak.
No more bitter, fierce distress
can ever render me so weak.
Copyright ©
MaryAnson
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2009-11-30 13:36:57]
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Re: Resolution
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 3rd December 2009 @ 01:02:32 PM AEST
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A cut above most rhyming poems. I especially liked this stanza:
'Fear, which made both my eyes shine.
Could anybody comprehend
this feature in my design?
My only choice was to pretend.'
it was very nice how you used enjambement in the middle of that stanza, it gave it a great structure.
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