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~Betwen The Lines~
Contributed by
inkmaster
on
Wednesday, 9th December 2009 @ 05:09:27 PM in AEST
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~ Between the lines~
Do you no the feeling
Of gray, does he knock
At you today to come in,
gray always wants to play.
Let gray in he will come
with a heartless grin,
over and over,
Time and time, again.
You can let gray ride,
until hesubsides or
turn to run away
and hide but gray,
Will always try to
step in.
Cast gray away dont
Let him in to ruin,
Another precious day.
Make sure you put gray
in his place turn him,
Far away from your
every day before
gray takes a bite
right of your soul..
inkmaster (C) 2009
Copyright ©
inkmaster
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2009-12-09 17:09:27]
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Re: ~Betwen The Lines~
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by laststarontheleft on
Thursday, 10th December 2009 @ 05:46:24 AM AEST
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Very well said hun!
Excellent write
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Re: ~Betwen The Lines~
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 11th December 2009 @ 09:14:09 AM AEST
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Okay, when I say this, I am genuinely and sincerely curious. I mean no disrespect as I do respect the finesse of your writings and the deep profound thoughts. Really.
However, you say you have a publisher. So, with that, when the publisher reads something like this, does the publisher say anything about pride in work and proper use of words? Do you no the feeling instead of Do you know the feeling? Or taking pride to proof reread before posting, like he subsides instead of hesubsides?
Really, I think a lot of poets here and around would love to be fortunate enough to have a publisher because there are a lot of the poets who take much pride in their work and also deserve to be published. They take care to make sure their work is as perfect as possible before anyone sees it. For example, it's and its, there/their/they're, etc.
Just observations.
I say nicely written but using the right word or words makes excellence.
Take care and have a pleasant day.
Tim
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