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Beg Me
Contributed by
ToxicityOfTheCity
on
Friday, 11th December 2009 @ 10:45:30 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Do what needs to be done
Pain and blood
Pleasure and lust
I must have more
Crack of whip
Rustle of chains
Heavy breaths
Moans of mixing emotions
Smell of leather
Arousal peaks
Human sweat and tears
Taste the fear
Excitement heightens
Anticipation strains
Wrists rub raw from my chains
Beg me
Louder, louder
Climax descends
End over end
Blood cools
Welts swell
Sweat dries
Locks release
Copyright ©
ToxicityOfTheCity
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2009-12-11 10:45:30]
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Re: Beg Me
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by laststarontheleft on
Friday, 11th December 2009 @ 12:42:10 PM AEST
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Now thats what i call dirty!
Great write tox! |
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Re: Beg Me
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by Fuzzy on
Friday, 11th December 2009 @ 03:32:16 PM AEST
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i'm now gonna have a cup of tea.
calm me down.lol
well written it's very good.
Take care. |
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Re: Beg Me
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 15th December 2009 @ 04:55:18 PM AEST
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That doesn't sound like lack of experience,
the familiar tone certainly made for
a more vivid read, nice suspense thriller.
-D.Truth
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Re: Beg Me
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by adub1138 on
Tuesday, 15th December 2009 @ 06:31:26 PM AEST
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This is Toxicity I know and love...
I like that you don't know who's perspective its from until the end. Did you think about keeping that way? Omniscient. I like the ambiguity that brings, you can't tell who perspective its from if its a perspective at all. Just a random thought.
I do like the filthy (at least by society's standards) nature of the poem. Maybe we can get a peek more into this... hrrmmmmm. |
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