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This is your out
Contributed by
SilentMuse
on
Thursday, 24th December 2009 @ 03:05:16 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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I'm quite fimular with the hand you've been delt
I've done this to you it's on this I've dwelt
But this burdens not yours and all will be fine
Just delete all my hearts contents from your mind
Forget everything writen and every word spoke
Forget every messege sent about everything hoped
I can just pretend, and everything will be the same
And we can continue to play are game
Copyright ©
SilentMuse
... [
2009-12-24 15:05:16]
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Re: This is your out
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by XslainhopeX on
Thursday, 24th December 2009 @ 09:59:07 PM AEST
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| The problem is i didnt want a way out. You always give me one but its not like i want to take them. your just afraid. I dont wnt to delete you from my mind but every chance you get you give me a reason to. like you want me out of your life. pretending never gets you anywhere because in the end its still the same. |
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Re: This is your out
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by brittany24 on
Friday, 25th December 2009 @ 03:45:35 PM AEST
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| I really like the beginning and body but the ending seems to weaken the message and the poem |
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Re: This is your out
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by ChaosFactor on
Sunday, 27th December 2009 @ 06:00:57 AM AEST
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| But what if not everyone wants out? What if they want in? |
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