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A Painter's Mistake
Contributed by
brittany24
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Monday, 28th December 2009 @ 09:39:01 PM in AEST
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My world a vast sea of white
I'm no longer able to create color to fill in this empty space
How I long to fill my canvas with the vibrant colors of life, love, happiness
These colors dry now, carelessly left uncovered ruined by the sun
How could I be so careless?
How I miss the stroke of my painters brush
It being of no use must be abandoned for the sharp lines of a pen
Still, with this pen I will create unending lines
Lines that stretch across my universe
Maybe someday they will be filled in with beautiful colors and the sharp edges smoothed by a brush
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2009-12-28 21:39:01]
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Re: A Painter's Mistake
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by iodinelove on
Monday, 28th December 2009 @ 09:47:54 PM AEST
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I like it. It is, however, missing something...
I see a lot of potential in the lines
Still, with this pen I will create unending lines
Lines that stretch across my universe
Always, abraham
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Re: A Painter's Mistake
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 28th December 2009 @ 09:49:27 PM AEST
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I really like the analogy and metaphor. Seems you have created great imagery while comparing it with difficult life decisions.
Take care and keep up the good work. 
Tim
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Re: A Painter's Mistake
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by northernlights on
Monday, 28th December 2009 @ 11:59:48 PM AEST
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| lots of great imagery in this with paralells to life. I can imagine the canvass and the artists frustration but also the hope in continuing to paint/live until there are beautiful colours ie hope for a better life |
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Re: A Painter's Mistake
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by Ambivalence on
Wednesday, 6th January 2010 @ 02:18:25 AM AEST
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the emptiness u felt was beautifully written here
the deep inspiration you're looking for
will be delivered by either someone special
or by yourself!
take care
-K.Z. |
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