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Punch Drunk
Contributed by
JakerBaker88
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Thursday, 18th March 2010 @ 12:58:02 AM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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Punch drunk,
Called me up.
Declarations incoherent,
Voice drowsy,
Words sluggish and slow----
I listened.
Stomach twisted,
In knots was tied
It lurched----
There was laughter on the line.
Feelings ridiculed,
Love made a mockary of,
Booze hound howels---
While I listened.
Punch drunk,
Stood me up.
Decimated hopes,
Devored expectaions,
Ruined romance----
Insulted me to the core.
Again, l listened----
This time to my heart.
It beats truth;
Whispers "let him go,
Leave him alone."
Yet, I cannot.
I am much too addicted.
Me,
A glutton for punishment.
Punch drunk on pain,
Held up on lies----
An infatuated Jane.
Myself,
Strung out,
Lame from the games,
Beaten down with need----
A rehab bound queen.
My destiny?
Unable to quit,
I'll repeat this dance,
Unable to resist my drug of choice----
Him.
Copyright ©
JakerBaker88
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2010-03-18 00:58:02]
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Re: Punch Drunk
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by northernlights on
Thursday, 18th March 2010 @ 03:58:23 AM AEST
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| Just as an addict gets addicted to the drug so a person gets controlled by the controller till as you quite rightly point out you question the destiny and the future.How do they control? by building you up and smashing you down.... love made a mockery of, beaten down with need,the sadness is its not about love but about power and need.... an infatuated Jane, this is a powerful write highlighting the elements of an unhealthy relationship well written |
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Re: Punch Drunk
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by DrcGaimer on
Thursday, 18th March 2010 @ 09:02:53 AM AEST
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| Excellent! Greatly enjoyed the flow of it. The sense of doom and lack of freedom from the subject is very dramatic. Loved the cliff-hanger ending. Leaves you wondering what happens next. |
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Re: Punch Drunk
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by spud on
Thursday, 18th March 2010 @ 12:05:09 PM AEST
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Hi,
Sad, but totally understandable. Where do you
go from here?? Only you can answer that.
Good luck and God bless.
Well written.
Tommy
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Re: Punch Drunk
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by Inchiostro on
Thursday, 18th March 2010 @ 08:15:38 PM AEST
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| i do like this but stop being so depressing all the time! and get on fb!! |
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Re: Punch Drunk
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by JaKar on
Monday, 22nd March 2010 @ 04:55:13 PM AEST
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i realy like this poem,i feel i can really relate to it.l
for i myslef feel i have overdosed, on such a drug called "him".And feel as if i would do it again and again.Well writen and understandable. |
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