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Asleep
Contributed by
Chamaron
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Sunday, 21st March 2010 @ 11:32:16 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Painters kisses on fleshy canvas
Awake me alive and comfort to dream
A warmth bridge of throwaway hearts
Stacked bowls sleeping in the curves
Needed hands crisscrossed just so
Flesh melted into one
A comfort as if I slept
In the crescent of a dreamland moon
Bringing home along
Snuggled in my hiding place
The whisper of breath to verify
Not alone, its safe to fall
Within our arms
Asleep
Copyright ©
Chamaron
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2010-03-21 23:32:16]
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Re: Asleep
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by Shattered_soul on
Monday, 22nd March 2010 @ 09:16:45 AM AEST
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great poem
it is a great feeling to fall asleep in the most comforting of arms. |
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Re: Asleep
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 22nd March 2010 @ 08:04:37 PM AEST
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I think your author's note speaks volumes. And the words that follow are like chocolate. Sweet, decadent and silky. This makes the reader long for the softness of someone's breath. For the warmth and comfort that only comes from lying next to the one you adore. Simply and absolutely, perfectly sublime this is. Beautiful write.
Seléne ~
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Re: Asleep
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 22nd March 2010 @ 09:15:05 PM AEST
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A stunning write full of bloom and imagery throwing color at the reader. Reading this is like staring into a painting. The placement of words is beautifully done and this was a joy to read.
take care
duff |
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Re: Asleep
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by northernlights on
Tuesday, 23rd March 2010 @ 03:20:46 AM AEST
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Beautifully expressed....Painter's kisses on fleshy canvas,safe and secure in a lovers arms,
you are right nothing better. |
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