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Factory of misery
Contributed by
DevinHman
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Sunday, 28th March 2010 @ 10:51:40 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Welcome....
To the factory of misery
The chapel of blasphemy
And the end of the world.
The seed..?
I'll sow it
But you'll kill it
I know it
So come with me
A refugee
Un-molded clay
To be molded by me
A uniform sculpture
In a chaotic sea
and did I mention the sea is blood?
Copyright ©
DevinHman
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2010-03-28 22:51:40]
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Re: Factory of misery
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by Antzus on
Tuesday, 30th March 2010 @ 10:44:20 AM AEST
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| Nice! No not nice. Sinister. The reader is helpless to the horrible fate assigned him by this all-powerful author. I don't like that last line though - seems very out of place (plus, I keep imagining a stupid scene at the end of a Metalocalypse episode!!). I'm not sure there's much more to be added really- the "welcomer" seems almost cocky, as though he need not say any more. I like how it is here - short, abstract, punchy. |
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