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Shrapnel
Contributed by
Cayleigh-Chan
on
Monday, 5th April 2010 @ 05:03:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I
c
a
r
e
so much,
I
h
u
r
t
inside,
Whenever you
c
r
y
my name.
When you hurt yourself,
I feel it just the same.
Should I care,
Or should I not?
...I can't take this anymore!
This
self-destructive
path your on,
I can no longer fallow.
At this rate your body will self-destruct,
3...
2...
1...
I refuse to get hit by
s
h
r
a
p
n
e
l
!
Copyright ©
Cayleigh-Chan
... [
2010-04-05 17:03:15]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
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Re: Shrapnel
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 5th April 2010 @ 05:45:37 PM AEST
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Interesting way to place words on the page and what extremely powerful words. A hazard of emotional connection ... the fallout. This is deeply moving and so very affecting. For most, it is excruciatingly relatable. Well done.
Seléne ~
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Re: Shrapnel
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 5th April 2010 @ 08:14:05 PM AEST
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This is awesome in the way you have put this down. The writing layout is unique and fresh and i applaud you for that. Its fitting to your words as it's like a bomb going off. This is just great and cleverly written.
take care
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Re: Shrapnel
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by Loende on
Wednesday, 7th April 2010 @ 02:46:02 PM AEST
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A very cleverly written poem! Especially
since it did not lose any power by the
artistry used. It's really hard to be around
someone who's hurting themselves. As
someone who use to be stuck in that
vicious cycle, I can completely understand
how difficult it gets to stand next to them.
Shrapnel, is a very good explanation of the
fallout. Great job.
Be strong when they can't...sometimes
that's the only way we can get through.
Be well,
Loende |
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