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The Dirt of Inertia
Contributed by
puppy_dog_eyes
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Friday, 9th April 2010 @ 02:47:59 PM in AEST
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Each day grinds the dirt of inertia deeper in my eyes
September sky's yellow hue bleached out by the smog of grey and white clouds
Life is a cage inside a wheel
Struggling to keep momentum as revolutions crush the soul
Another turn to smash the will
Where is the key to unlock this prison?
Frustration is the bleak overlord of all that I survey
Blinkers future aspirations, binds to the negative
Bridges ripped apart by uncertainty and doubt
The fuel of change, ignited by those who shun convention
Burns against howling wind and is snuffed out
If this maze has an exit then maybe it is overgrown
Trapping me forever on an unfulfilling path
No more than embryo, waiting to be born
Slave to the rythm of a song that has no end
This dirge without a melody, now mere cacophony
Questions left unanswered, for I cannot find a sage
Running blind to the precipice, where will I find my guide ?
To steer me to renewal, to wake dead man walking
Before the fire of willing grows forever cold.
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Re: The Dirt of Inertia
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by JakerBaker88 on
Friday, 9th April 2010 @ 03:13:17 PM AEST
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I can definately relate to this poem; in fact, you've described how I've been feeling for a while now. My favorite lines were, " Slave to the rythm of a song that has no end.This dirge without a melody, now mere cacophony." However, the poem as a whole was masterfully written with strong imagery and powerful sentiment. Thanks for sharing this with the rest of us.
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Re: The Dirt of Inertia
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by Loende on
Friday, 9th April 2010 @ 05:00:10 PM AEST
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Good grief, ain't that the truth! I felt
like you were reading my mind, because
of late, I'm resembling a darn hamster
and the wheel is barely cranking! I'm
not sure if the tough times make
indecision and inertia harder to deal
with, because, let's face it, regardless
of the economy, a rut is a rut and if we're
human beings, we'll hit them.
You've captured the torturous cycle very
elegantly here. May you find your sage,
my friend and answers to move you
forward.
Be well,
~dawn |
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Re: The Dirt of Inertia
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by emystar on
Friday, 9th April 2010 @ 09:31:17 PM AEST
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Hey friend,
This is sad but awesome writing. I can remember days like this.
Just remember this to shall soon pass.
I've missed your writing.
Hang tuff friend.
big luv, huggs, blessings,
emy |
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Re: The Dirt of Inertia
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 10th April 2010 @ 01:26:03 PM AEST
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To be bold in the face of uncertainty and exact any kind of change is an arduous task at best. I'm sure many would recognize themselves in your words, but few could put it so acutely with the impeccable descriptions you've arranged here. This is eerily familiar. Sometimes all it takes is opportunity knocking to shake us from the hold of the mundane and we are set on a new course, steering us away from the ruts in life.
A wonderfully worderd, excellent post!
Seléne ~
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Re: The Dirt of Inertia
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by thistle_and_fern on
Sunday, 9th May 2010 @ 11:52:23 PM AEST
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The power to change sometimes eludes us.
The motivation to take the first step is frightening
But the longest journey starts with the smallest step
A change of direction or a change of attitude? hard choice
Positivity is the key
I struggle with it
Awesome - expect nothing less from your poetry Steve.
Take care
julie |
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