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Insult Me Again
Contributed by
Xnoybis
on
Sunday, 11th April 2010 @ 05:12:02 AM in AEST
Topic:
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It was like
The garden that
Represents
over expands
your imagination and desire
Into the pot
That you have designed
for yourself
It was every bit of perfect
that you imagined perfect
to be
By reading their words
Every cliche you dared to hold
Right there in your very arms
Blossomed
Complete
Like a movie ending
For tonight
We were
inseparable
She asks,
"Can you trust me?"
He answers,
"Insult me again."
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Xnoybis
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2010-04-11 05:12:02]
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Re: Insult Me Again
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 11th April 2010 @ 05:42:13 AM AEST
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I liked this very much, don't know, perhaps punctuation isn't your thing, but i think that would help it flow for me. Just some put in somewhere. I don't mean to criticise.
I liked it a lot, just thought i'd put in my two cents worth.
Cheers,
Mickey |
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