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MOOD SWING PART 2
Contributed by
BLUESOUL1313
on
Wednesday, 12th May 2010 @ 12:32:57 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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THE PLACE YOU GO, I CAN NOT FOLLOW.
WHEN YOU LEAVE, I AM HOLLOW.
A KISS YOU GIVE, YOU LOOK SO FINE.
WHEN YOU PRESS YOU LIPS, I WISH THEY TOUCHED MINE.
THE SMILE YOU HAVE, LIGHTS UP MY NIGHT.
WHEN YOU HOLD SOMEONE ELSE, I HIDE, OUT OF SIGHT.
YOUR LAUGH, IT RINGS EVEN WHEN YOU ARE GONE,
IF I CAN NOT SEE YOU, MY HOURS SEEM LONG.
TEMPTED TO TELL YOU JUST HOW I FEEL,
YET FEAR HOLDS ME BACK, LIKE A BROKEN WHEEL.
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BLUESOUL1313
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2010-05-12 00:32:57]
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Re: MOOD SWING PART 2
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 16th November 2010 @ 11:05:36 PM AEST
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I have learned over the years that life is much to short. If you feel this way about someone, just tell them and let the chips fall where they may. I really do like the poem, again for one, relating so much to it. Again, however, why the all caps writing? I think the read is easier if not all capitalization. Just a thought obviously since it's your poem and not mine. I also feel one should write the way they want to and not the way others expect them to.
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