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dying dying dying
Contributed by
LadyDama
on
Monday, 14th April 2003 @ 07:05:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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giving giving giving
rip her eyelashes out
taking taking taking
hear her scream and shout
ripping ripping ripping
her hearts bleeds like a lake
taping taping taping
try to bandage this mistake
loving loving loving
til there is no more
hating hating hating
oh, please show me the door
laughing laughing laughing
to cover up the pain
crying crying crying
oops, you've found me out again
living living living
with this grief inside
dying dying dying
it's easier to do than hide
march 2003
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LadyDama
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2003-04-14 19:05:00]
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Re: dying dying dying
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by olasunkanmi on
Monday, 14th April 2003 @ 07:16:28 PM AEST
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| Is really sad that we cant just stay alive forever,but with christ surely yes. I LOVE YOUR WORK. |
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Re: dying dying dying
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by Daydreamer on
Monday, 14th April 2003 @ 07:32:01 PM AEST
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| Good poem...I know what its like to hide your feelings...I am hear if you want to talk..:) ~Day~ |
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Re: dying dying dying
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 15th April 2003 @ 01:43:15 AM AEST
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I enjoyed this poem.
Michelle |
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Re: dying dying dying
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 15th April 2003 @ 01:50:27 AM AEST
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| Ooops, your poem is sad and beautiful. .. venkat |
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Re: dying dying dying
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by spooky on
Tuesday, 15th April 2003 @ 05:29:08 AM AEST
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| sad but well written,,and we can live forever through jesus christ,,our lord,, a friend in words,,spooky |
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Re: dying dying dying
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by Ilhar on
Tuesday, 15th April 2003 @ 07:19:34 AM AEST
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Again we seem to paralell in our lives.. I have felt that way many times...but it is my faith that keeps me going..reach inside to the creator that you believe in..hang on to that strength and love, it will sustain you
Shari |
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Re: dying dying dying
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 15th April 2003 @ 07:36:34 AM AEST
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a wonderful write.. much more interesting and to the point than most of this nature... much happiness and beauty to you,
hugs n' love too, nessa |
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Re: dying dying dying
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by full_blur on
Tuesday, 15th April 2003 @ 01:47:10 PM AEST
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| the repetative structure of this poem is great. You lull us into a cadence with the natural rhythm, and then attack with violent interleaving. Ingeneous, beautiful, but deliciously dark. |
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Re: dying dying dying
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by wolfflow on
Saturday, 19th April 2003 @ 10:24:04 AM AEST
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| this is mad good!! a great write |
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Re: dying dying dying
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by Butterat_Zool on
Tuesday, 22nd April 2003 @ 01:17:32 PM AEST
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| What a great poem! The first line hooked me in and then the second line hit me with such powerful imagery that i had to read on. Very clever. Very potent. Keep it up! Butterat Zool. |
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