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Sweet fortune
Contributed by
fish
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Monday, 31st May 2010 @ 04:09:47 PM in AEST
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Gentle as the drop of dew
Soft as the touch of roses petal
Sweet scent as the smell of queen-of the-night at dusk
Quick as the speed of light
So does sweet fortune comes.
A meal of insomnia and nostalgia, richly spiced with loneliness
Such was my daily meal
Though better and unpleasant yet swallow I must
Yes swallow I must
But not after you dew-dropped on me
Now days of sweet and nights of bliss are come back
Bright as the sun may shine
It doesnt cost strength, or tact or wealth
Shine it does because so it was purposed
Thou art kind for so you were purposed
Thou makesth me smile it must be thine nature
The noblest of me thou has defile
For now thinkest I de rien but thee and thine beauty
Thou art a sweet fortune that befalls an embattled sailor
T2m.
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Re: Sweet fortune
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by lovingcritters on
Monday, 7th June 2010 @ 05:51:25 PM AEST
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Your analogies were splendid Fish.
Gentle as a drop of drew, and soft as the touch of a rose petal. Excellent!
Sweet Fortune and then when you went ahead and explained what it did to you, that was very enjoyable. You combined emotion with consequences, The ending was very good too. Befalls an embattled Sailor, I'm not sure about the T2m, still a good way to sum it all up, and give your reader something to discern.
Great Fish, Great!
Warm love,
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