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drenched by love
Contributed by
MsAntonishaThomas
on
Friday, 11th June 2010 @ 01:21:06 PM in AEST
Topic:
LoveRemembered
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when i thought i was all alone
there was always someone there with me.
i turned around look upside down...
but then everywere i trurned that person seemed to follow me...
no matter what my struggle was at the present time....
that person never let me fall...
and even though i suffered
in the mist...
i made though it all...
but then one night at school i got in trouble...
and i almost made her loose her job
but then in the current time im praying for that not to be the conlusion...
but i guess i should have thought it over before i made that unknown solution...
i love this person and i hope to never leave her side...
but i guess it cant compare to the nearly lost...
because that same night....that peson had cryed...
i believe now this is were this heavy rain started to pour down on me...but it took this far for my eyes to see....
no matter what i do...
are how much i tugged..
this is the first time ever...
i felt DRENCED BY LOVE...
~dedicated to my god moma ...virginia robinson~
~! signed out : NISHA !~
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Re: drenched by love
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by joe-joe on
Friday, 11th June 2010 @ 02:56:35 PM AEST
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nice...it's good to know that in all this world there is someone that loves you, heart, mind,
and soul... |
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Re: drenched by love
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by fish on
Friday, 11th June 2010 @ 11:23:26 PM AEST
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i love this reminder. i love the way you kept the person hidden till the end of the poem, keep the reader reading. i love it.
there is a typo on line 14, and the way line 9 reads i don't quite catch the sense in it, maybe you should try reviewing it. just my opinion though.
BTW nice piece. |
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