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Thought Under A Ripening Sky.
Contributed by
cashfan1
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Saturday, 26th June 2010 @ 08:00:57 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I am sitting on the deck
Waiting for the sky to fully ripen
The luscious fruit of darkness.
The air is warm and heavily infused with elderflower
And the sweet scent of an English rose.
Outside on the road a car passes slowly, respectfully,
As if the driver can read every word of every stanza
That flows across the blank page of my mind.
The car is gone and the final fragments of light,
Heavy with silence, capture the birds in the aviary,
Their soft feathers and delicate faces
Cast out in a monochrome of shadows.
And still the sky hangs heavy with unripened fruit,
The horizon stenciled with storm clouds
From where something deeper, something more enticing
Is emerging, a slow determined shadow
Is crossing the mountains on the moon.
And then a slow breeze unfolds in the sultry air
And the moment is upon me
When the sky's fruit peels away the outer husks of light
And with a determined push opens the deep berry
Sweet mouthful of darkness.
At last the final word of the final stanza
Flows in a quickening rhythm across the page of my mind.
Going, at last, from blank to full.
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2010-06-26 08:00:57]
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Re: Thought Under A Ripening Sky.
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 26th June 2010 @ 10:40:28 AM AEST
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I like this...a lot! Has a very serene feel to it plus I like the fact of how you write about the process of what's going through your mind of creating a poem.
Thank you for a great read.
Tim
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Re: Thought Under A Ripening Sky.
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by Debris on
Saturday, 26th June 2010 @ 02:45:18 PM AEST
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"The luscious fruit of darkness"- wonderful line, almost sexual, which I guess is all part of nature.
Thanks for posting. |
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Re: Thought Under A Ripening Sky.
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by Eagle on
Sunday, 27th June 2010 @ 05:32:23 AM AEST
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| Very decriptive of a beautiful period of the day. |
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Re: Thought Under A Ripening Sky.
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by lnnie on
Sunday, 27th June 2010 @ 11:12:21 AM AEST
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I am sitting on the deck
Waiting for the sky to fully ripen
The luscious fruit of darkness.
Great opening line and a wonderful poem. I will read more. |
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Re: Thought Under A Ripening Sky.
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by Dillybar on
Monday, 28th June 2010 @ 05:35:04 PM AEST
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| pretty descriptive I enjoyed reading |
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Re: Thought Under A Ripening Sky.
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by The_Unknown on
Saturday, 3rd July 2010 @ 10:14:42 AM AEST
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Very descriptive, I loved it!
I felt like I could picture every second of it. |
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Re: Thought Under A Ripening Sky.
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by lovingcritters on
Thursday, 15th July 2010 @ 09:28:48 AM AEST
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AhhhhhhhhhhhDennis, your poetry is so Divine. Your analogies so in line!
You should publish, publish, publish, for one as talented as you................should share, share, and share again your lovely poetry,
You have a beautiful, loving gift!
Warm love
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Re: Thought Under A Ripening Sky.
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by NathanPaul on
Tuesday, 20th July 2010 @ 03:47:39 PM AEST
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| No My Friend. THIS is well written. Excellent job. |
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