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So Close Yet So Far
Contributed by
psychopunk
on
Wednesday, 16th April 2003 @ 10:05:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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he walks up to the door looks up at the sky cloudy and gray so so depressing knocks on the door stands up straight and smiles trys to seem carefree but deep inside his heart is in so much pain door opens there she is so beautiful such a sweet innocent face his smile quickly becomes a frown she looks up at him with her teary eyes grabs his hand puts something in it and gentle closes it he then opens it and sees his class ring closes his eyes and thinks THIS CANT BE HAPPENING he opens his eyes and sees her crying he gives her a hug and begins to cry goodbye I will always love you she says he nods his head and thinks WHY IS SHE DOING THIS THEN IF SHE LOVES ME he gets into his car and stares at her and begins to think of the past WHAT DID I DO? WE PROMISED TO BE TOGETHER FOREVER I WAS THERE FOR HER AS MUCH I AS COULD BE I CANT GO ON ------------- starts his car drives to a parking lot not to far from the house looks at the sky and the river turns the radio on ITS THEIR SONG he crys again I LOVE HER I CANT GO ON he writes something on a piece of paper then reaches for his wallet takes her picture out and stares at it then he reaches into his dash pulls out a pistol stares at it closes his eyes and nods yes leaves his car and goes into the woods and sits on a rock next to a tree looks up into the sky then looks at her picture again SO BEAUTIFUL SO PRECIOUS sighs holds the piece of paper and her picture to his heart so so depressing puts the gun into his mouth sweats heavily closes his eyes and thinks SORRY MY LOVE I JUST CANT... takes a deep breath.... a tear runs down his cheek BANG!!! town goes silent the bang rings throughout the town ------------IN THAT TIME PERIOD---------- she closes the door and runs to her room WHY DO I FEEL LIKE THIS WHY? WAS THAT THE RIGHT THING TO DO? she then relizes she is still deeply in love with him WHAT HAVE I DONE I HAVE TO HAVE HIM BACK she runs to the door and opens it...... BANG! she hears a gunshot her heart begins to beat faster she runs to the street wondering where that noice came from she sees his car in the parking lot still started she lets out a sigh of relief and then smiles and runs to the car as shes running a bad feeling creeps into her she finally gets to the car and looks in the window and sees nothing but can hear the faint sound of their song she smiles WHERE IS HE? she calls out his name then she notices his hat on the ground at the begining of the woods as she walks towards it to pick it up she sees him sitting on a rock agaist a tree she lets out another sigh of relief and yells WHAT ARE YOU DOING?!?!? no answer TALK TO ME PLEASE!!!! no answer I LOVE YOU!!!!! starts to cry TALK TO ME!!!!! I LOVE YOU DO YOU HEAR ME I LOVE YOU DAMNIT!!!! she runs over to him crying and sees blood all over him gun in his hand she stares in horror NO! NO! THIS CANT BE! NO!!!! WHY DID YOU DO THIS WHY?!?!?! then sees a piece of paper in his hand with her picture she takes paper and reads it TO MY LOVE NOT SURE HOW YOU WILL BE GETTING THIS BUT I HAD TO WRITE MY FEELINGS DOWN I WISH IT DIDNT HAVE TO BE LIKE THIS I WANTED TO BE WITH YOU FOREVER I JUST COULDNT PART FROM YOU I LOVE YOU she starts to cry heavily NOOOOOO!!! MY BABY!!! I MUST BE WITH YOU!! she says determined she sits on his lap and lays against him she sees a tear on his cheek she wipes it off with her finger closes her eyes and kisses it she then digs into her pocket and takes out his picture puts his picture in with the piece of paper and her picter takes his hand with the note and his and her pictures and holds it to her heart she gives him a kiss on the lips I LOVE YOU I WILL SEE YOU SOON BABY takes his other hand with the gun and puts it in her mouth slides her finger over his and grips his hand tightly closes her eyes and takes a deep breath BANG!!! two passionate lovers dead together so awful yet so beautiful they're so close yet so far
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2003-04-16 22:05:00] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: So Close Yet So Far
(User Rating: 1 ) by MoonlitAngel on
Thursday, 17th April 2003 @ 11:36:06 AM AEST (User
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That was amazing... so compelling. I couldn't tear my eyes away from the screen! Excellent job, I'm impressed. Blessed be,
~ Moonlit Angel |
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Re: So Close Yet So Far
(User Rating: 1 ) by Eloise on
Friday, 18th April 2003 @ 03:12:33 AM AEST (User
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well... i have to say moonlight angel pretty much said it all... it sent shivers up my spine as i was reading... this is amazing... |
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Re: So Close Yet So Far
(User Rating: 1 ) by Kirby on
Saturday, 19th April 2003 @ 07:39:05 PM AEST (User
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Such a great poem, just like Romeo and Juliet but with a twist. I loved it. Very well put. |
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Re: So Close Yet So Far
(User Rating: 1 ) by AngryPrincess on
Sunday, 20th April 2003 @ 02:27:46 PM AEST (User
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truely amazing write here psychopunk, the other 3 people said it perfectly...spine shivering and just absolutely beautiful...
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Re: So Close Yet So Far
(User Rating: 1 ) by Steb3544 on
Tuesday, 27th May 2003 @ 09:41:20 PM AEST (User
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I loved. It made me feel as if I were there. I almost had tears in my eyes. It was awsome.
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Re: So Close Yet So Far
(User Rating: 1 ) by ruby_star_angel on
Monday, 16th June 2003 @ 06:15:40 PM AEST (User
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Oh, I love it! It kinda reminds me of my last relationship......it really touched me. It has very strong emotions in it....I won't ever forget this poem. I'll keep it. Hope you don't feel this way.. |
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