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Confused lingering
Contributed by
zeberdee
on
Monday, 13th September 2010 @ 05:09:48 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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The hammer on the table evokes your mind
with the spiteful hatred of your past.
The crushing resemblance to try to find
and to loose yourself in contrast
Searching and seaching but running wild
following the lost path of the vengeful child.
Loosing myself amid the world of stigmas
and the idiots following the big flash
I try to raise my thinking here in vain
cause I have become numb to the worlds pain.
I've been soaking below the floor and watching the madness unfold
watching people act on their feelings whilst not realizing they are controlled
Im sick by all this confusion
I say while I cry and point my finger
to reach the ultimate conclusion
that I no longer will lie here and linger.
Copyright ©
zeberdee
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2010-09-13 05:09:48]
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Re: Confused lingering
(User Rating: 1 )
by tam on
Monday, 13th September 2010 @ 04:13:18 PM AEST
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Some lines go together well and support your efforts.
Lines 7 and 8 confuse me. overall I like it! |
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