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Paradise
Contributed by
scottstone
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Tuesday, 21st September 2010 @ 11:46:40 AM in AEST
Topic:
sarcasticpoetry
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I know just were I came from
I am my fathers son
Fast forward 18 years now
My life has just begun
I try to stay in order
To play it all in tune
They push me off to college
Did I graduate too soon?
Now turn into a masterpiece
Be beautiful and loved
Its all theyve ever dreamed of
What if Im none of the above?
And friends is what we call them
They love us all so much
Now play just what we tell you
Or be forever judged
We want you to be happy
So do just what we say
Let us arrange the music
It will all turn out ok
For life is only skin deep
A shallow swimming pool
The prettier the better
A heart was made for fools
True love is just a sickness
An ailment of the brain
Lets have sex until we drop dead
The booze will numb the pain
This is the life worth leading
Your friends will all agree
So drink away the heartache
You dont want them to see
Now live your life with purpose
Youre born, you live, and die
The rest is minor details
Nobody wants to see you cry
This is the truth you gave me
Its what reality would scream
Sometimes I pinch myself and wonder
Is this the perfect dream?
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scottstone
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2010-09-21 11:46:40]
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Re: Paradise
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by Dionlogue on
Tuesday, 21st September 2010 @ 12:48:24 PM AEST
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| I actually really liked the poem. Maybe a little long but all in all its good :) |
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Re: Paradise
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by TheRookie66 on
Tuesday, 21st September 2010 @ 01:48:32 PM AEST
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| Sounds like my college career and my life right now actually. Good job depicting this. |
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Re: Paradise
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by TsunamiWaverider on
Tuesday, 21st September 2010 @ 05:09:36 PM AEST
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Some traces of excellence to this poem with some memorable (and potentially plagerizable) lines to it. LOL
The rhyming metre is off slightly in a few places, but all in all, an enjoyable work.
Well done.
Cheers. |
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Re: Paradise
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by ming on
Thursday, 23rd September 2010 @ 09:06:32 AM AEST
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LOVE the sarcasm...
ming |
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Re: Paradise
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by sidneyconrad23 on
Friday, 19th November 2010 @ 02:47:11 PM AEST
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| Wow really really nice loved the way you used the words you made the poem come alive always use that gift you have. |
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