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Acting On A Crush
Contributed by
Bexstasy
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Friday, 15th October 2010 @ 04:46:41 PM in AEST
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You pull me closer,
A glimmer in your eyes,
Your breath on my neck,
Excitement based on lies,
Your hands on my hips,
I feel such a rush,
We move to the beat,
Acting on a crush,
We move closer still,
And I spare you a kiss,
I love how it feels,
Being reckless like this,
The music takes over,
With a nocternal thrill,
Lust is what I wanted,
And that's what we fulfill.
Copyright ©
Bexstasy
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2010-10-15 16:46:41]
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Re: Acting On A Crush
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 15th October 2010 @ 11:34:42 PM AEST
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| "Being reckless like this"...that was my favorite line...nice job |
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Re: Acting On A Crush
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by cashfan1 on
Saturday, 16th October 2010 @ 02:01:11 AM AEST
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| This is really well written. It rhymes and flows straight off the page, also it is very descriptive. Thanks for sharing. |
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Re: Acting On A Crush
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by chrisdavid on
Saturday, 16th October 2010 @ 04:40:12 AM AEST
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This one moves along at a pace. Great rhyming and choice of words. Another competent write, Very enjoyable!
Take care, Chris. |
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Re: Acting On A Crush
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by ming on
Saturday, 16th October 2010 @ 11:41:44 AM AEST
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I normally do NOT read poems that rhyme (except Dr. Zeus) but yours caught me and I rode it till the end. Good one.
ming |
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Re: Acting On A Crush
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by williamdye on
Monday, 18th October 2010 @ 06:34:43 AM AEST
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| reminds me of my youth, good writing. |
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Re: Acting On A Crush
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 22nd October 2010 @ 02:01:56 PM AEST
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Well, despite being old (unless 42 isn't old, some say it is, some not), you've made me remember what it was like to be young again,
Nice work.
Steve |
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