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Empty Now
Contributed by
cheshire
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Monday, 8th November 2010 @ 01:05:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
drugabuse
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Shes empty now that her syringe is
Dying slow kinda like her savior Jesus did
Though not as famous or as cared for
Cause to the world shes just another dead whore
When the blue creeps up on her pink lips
And her eyes roll back as her life slips
Away, you say, to a better place
Ha! At least shes done looking at her lost face
Parents put her in a cedar case
With tears crashing, babys not in church with her dress and lace
Theyre reminded of her baptism when life just started
From begin to end to same people except theyre left broken-hearted
It began with hope and ended in pain
A promise failed, that troubles could be overcame
Finding trust and love, life was not the same
She saw a glimpse of Heaven then God called her name
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2010-11-08 13:05:03]
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Re: Empty Now
(User Rating: 1 )
by Spike on
Monday, 8th November 2010 @ 01:31:26 PM AEST
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good social rap; started tight, blew out a little at the middle but came in solid at the conclusion. Some great lines and strong rhymes, y'all.
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Re: Empty Now
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by JJAA_91 on
Wednesday, 10th November 2010 @ 07:07:43 AM AEST
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| some awesome imagery in this. well done |
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Re: Empty Now
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by deusdeira on
Thursday, 18th November 2010 @ 04:02:25 PM AEST
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| overall i liked it. passion, and decent form. |
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