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Finding an Ending
Contributed by
faffeee
on
Monday, 21st April 2003 @ 04:35:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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The dry heat that crackled over the earth
Slipped away with the sinking sun.
Now like a river bursting its bulging banks
We spew onto the pavement as one.
A sweaty heat sprung from frantic dancing feet
Collides with a gulp of icy freshness,
Spreading an air of aloof excitement
A mysterious mist veiling anticipation breathless.
People collect themselves and find each other,
We are all as one like sisters and brothers.
The crowd huddles around the one with the plan,
The night is still young we need somewhere to land.
I single you out.
(You always stuck out,
Shooting up so high
With your head in the sky.)
The old ache I almost greet as a friend
Attacks without fail, back to haunt me again
And its not long till it creeps up to my chest
Clutching my heart and constricting my breath.
My eyes stick to you though Im tearing them away
I hate having to see you but I want you to stay
I know its not possible but I wish there was a way
For us to work, but WAIT I remember that day
b r e a t h e..
I clutch onto my friends, hanging on for the sanity
My mind flutters back to its home
We wander through the streets, flashing lights, distant beats
I struggle with being alone
I decide there and then, to act like a friend
To smile sweetly and laugh at your jokes
Surely being friendly, can only lead to where I want to be
Surely youll feel what Ive felt all along.
WRONG
You confuse me, do you use me? I feel your eyes staring through me
Do you see me? Dont wanna be me, you perceive me then deceive me
I hate you, I love you, I want to hurt you but youre too you
I know were through, I lose, I hate it but I know its true
One minute I think you care, but suddenly Im not even there
I tried my best to really care; for once I really did care
You left me, thats plenty enough pain
But you cant go on playing games
You look me in the eyes
With that meaning underlying
You make me die inside
You know
You have the power to make me believe your love is alive.
I need the power to walk away from this night.
I need the power to walk away from you.
As I
b r e a t h e..
I know
It could have been so perfect
But was it even worth it?
Copyright ©
faffeee
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2003-04-21 04:35:00]
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Re: Finding an Ending
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by tease_whizz on
Monday, 21st April 2003 @ 06:52:11 AM AEST
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excellent write...you express all your emotions really well and i love the powerful thought process in this poem.
thanks for all your comments on my poems. how weird is this...my name is Kate too, i live in north london and frequently go to feet first! scary! lol. keep writing, Kate x |
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Re: Finding an Ending
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by faffeee on
Wednesday, 23rd April 2003 @ 01:42:55 PM AEST
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| thanku!! wow! that is very very weird..in fact im shattered right now cos of last night at ff, were u there? look forward to more of your work, kate xx |
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Re: Finding an Ending
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by Wilder on
Tuesday, 29th April 2003 @ 06:16:27 PM AEST
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| definetly one of the better poems ive read. :) |
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Re: Finding an Ending
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 6th May 2003 @ 04:14:44 PM AEST
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Buff poem kate, im sure we'll be seeing that in anthologys in years to come. extremly vivid imagry, especially for anyone whose been to feet first. really emotive.
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Re: Finding an Ending
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by faffeee on
Wednesday, 7th May 2003 @ 05:52:56 PM AEST
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| oh ur such a meanie i cant believe you found me! ur too clever for ur own good! cant wait to maybe bump into some of ur stuff..?let me know if u do so i have a fair chance! hope u did actually like it, guess u can guess who its about!! xxx |
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Re: Finding an Ending
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by faffeee on
Wednesday, 7th May 2003 @ 06:01:48 PM AEST
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| thats so lovely!! thanku, i'll be looking out for sum of ur stuff!! xxx |
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Re: Finding an Ending
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 4th June 2003 @ 11:28:56 PM AEST
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I agree with the other comments, this poem is fantastic! raw with emotion, painting vivid pictures in the minds eye
Good Luck with your exams, i think they're around now
- Becca |
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