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A Wave Goodbye.
Contributed by
cashfan1
on
Monday, 29th November 2010 @ 03:01:09 AM in AEST
Topic:
NaturePoetry
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To the desperate trees
The pigeons have come to roast,
High in branches stiffened by winter's wrath
They hum a tune of fond farewell
To the last dregs of light in lonely late November.
Through all the fields
A subtle blend of darkness roams
And in hedgerow and secret hollow
The earth groans under the weight of frost.
By river banks and mountain lake
The ice, a delicate membrane, slides across the eye
Of this mountain kingdom.
And as the last birds take flight across the water
They cast a monochrome of wonder
In the icy stillness.
And so at last this day is waved goodbye
By the frosty hand of desolate deep mid-winter.
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Re: A Wave Goodbye.
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by huwbeauty on
Monday, 29th November 2010 @ 03:20:24 AM AEST
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| really good i like this.it is beautiful when there's a covering of snow and frost like there is at the moment and you really captured that. |
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Re: A Wave Goodbye.
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by Fern on
Monday, 29th November 2010 @ 11:47:06 AM AEST
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| BEAUTIFUL! BEAUTIFUL! BEAUTIFUL! As I read your poem, I feel like I'm sitting on a distant hill gazing at a breathtakingly beautiful landscape and observing all the lovely and profound events you so beautifully describe in your fabulous poem. "The ice, a delicate membrane." How clever you are! The last 2 lines of your poem are the real clincher. Very emotional...sad, yet hopeful that Spring may perhaps return one day. Write on! You've got super talent!!!!!!! |
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Re: A Wave Goodbye.
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by duff on
Monday, 29th November 2010 @ 02:48:32 PM AEST
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Picturesque and stunning imagery my friend. You can lose yourself in this which is awesome. I really dig it. Keep on writing.
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Re: A Wave Goodbye.
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by mehuel on
Wednesday, 1st December 2010 @ 09:04:29 AM AEST
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| very picturesque, one can easily get blended into the whole scenery, always a very soothing trait... |
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Re: A Wave Goodbye.
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by ming on
Wednesday, 1st December 2010 @ 09:50:06 AM AEST
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A beautiful stark landscape is painted with your words. :) I think you mean roost in this sentence though. :)
'To the desperate trees
The pigeons have come to roast,
High in branches stiffened by winter's wrath
They hum a tune of fond farewell'
ming |
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