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I Ain't Dead
Contributed by
ammar
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Monday, 29th November 2010 @ 08:59:11 AM in AEST
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Dont you think Im gone and dead,
Im watching you every moment instead:
How you dress, what you eat,
Where you go, whom you meet,
I see you adapting to new ways
Putting behind you the good old days
I know youre always trying to forget
The memory of me, which youll regret
Without me, youre sure to suffer pain:
There is much to lose and little to gain,
Of the dangers ahead, I aint unaware
And I aint the one whod cease to care
A lot between us is yet unsaid;
Dont you pretend Im gone and dead
For you didnt strangle me, or stab with a knife:
Im searching for a way to reenter your life
I am no lover or friend or foe
But I am your Conscience, this youd know:
I will return, and eventually win,
And resume my work to save you from sin
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Re: I Ain't Dead
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by Fern on
Monday, 29th November 2010 @ 11:28:32 AM AEST
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| Ammar! How clever! Wow! This is really one of the best pieces I've come across in a long time. How provocative. The conscience taunting him, as it were. "Don't you think I'm gone and dead." Beautiful line! "Without me, you're sure to suffer pain." My God, that line is haunting, Ammar! "Don't you pretend I'm gone and dead." You are a poet/philosopher! And brilliant as both! I really want to read more of your "stuff!" |
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Re: I Ain't Dead
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by duff on
Monday, 29th November 2010 @ 04:30:33 PM AEST
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This was fun to read. Highly imaginative and a well written piece of poetry. The creativity can easily be admired. Well done.
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Re: I Ain't Dead
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by Anbarean on
Tuesday, 30th November 2010 @ 10:53:58 AM AEST
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Wow this is one great poem with beautiful rhyme....
I love the way you write and specialy...
""""Without me, you’re sure to suffer pain:
There is much to lose and little to gain,""""
and when you said...
I will return, and eventually win,
so well said Love it
Take care
XXXXX
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Re: I Ain't Dead
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by ming on
Wednesday, 19th October 2011 @ 11:27:49 AM AEST
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Very creative! Love how I thought one thing at the begining of this read, and then some thing else entirely by the end. Good work!
ming |
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