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The road to paradise
Contributed by
iodinelove
on
Friday, 10th December 2010 @ 11:24:29 PM in AEST
Topic:
abstract
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Too far
The road
To paradise
Too far
The neon hues
Of pleasure
My eyes are
Weatherworn
And heavy
My shoes are
Tattered, ripped,
And torn
My voice is
Haggard; stretched;
Forlorn
Too soon
Drear moonlight
Comes
Too soon
Dread hour
Draws near
Copyright ©
iodinelove
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2010-12-10 23:24:29]
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Re: The road to paradise
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by Anbarean on
Friday, 10th December 2010 @ 11:31:07 PM AEST
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Nice writting...
and the title is awesome
"THE ROAD TO PARADISE"
takecare
Anbarean
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Re: The road to paradise
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by xHeathenx on
Saturday, 11th December 2010 @ 12:45:39 AM AEST
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Seems rather simplistic, even with the good choice of words, and rather complicated in its own simplicity.
I want to wish the traveler luck on their journey.
Nice job. |
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Re: The road to paradise
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by Voyager on
Saturday, 11th December 2010 @ 01:24:22 AM AEST
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| moments in time captured....very nice...:-) |
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Re: The road to paradise
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by ming on
Saturday, 11th December 2010 @ 09:28:27 AM AEST
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Simple, bittersweet & loving this! At your best when you'play'!
ming |
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Re: The road to paradise
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by Njd1105 on
Saturday, 11th December 2010 @ 10:14:55 AM AEST
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| Very good. Different. Love it |
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Re: The road to paradise
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by emystar on
Saturday, 11th December 2010 @ 01:55:30 PM AEST
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Hi Abe,
Very creative as always.
smiles, huggs,
emy |
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