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Atone Alone
Contributed by
Jonathon_J_Young
on
Wednesday, 29th December 2010 @ 11:05:57 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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Take me now without detain,
Ease my suffering and pain.
Ive lost my heart down in the drain,
And now it feels Ive gone insane.
When did I become so low?
It seems I am my greatest foe.
I know I reap the seeds I sew,
But this is some tormenting woe.
Im waiting for the end of days,
I feel so torn from my dismays.
Most memories are but a haze,
But still I remember your beautiful gaze.
The wrongs Ive done has left me cold,
The devilry in the world has taken me hold.
Affliction this awful could not be foretold,
In this life without you my good wont unfold.
Ive lost the way; Ive lost my soul,
Ive relinquished all my self-control.
And for my blunder I pay the toll,
My life is but an empty hole.
I hate to feel ones sympathy,
It has the incentive of inequity.
I just need to atone before its too late,
And I am passed judgement at St. Peters gate.
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Re: Atone Alone
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by UNORTHODOX on
Thursday, 30th December 2010 @ 03:41:07 AM AEST
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What's striking about yhis piece
is the desire to atone for what ever
wrong committed is truely sincere
while reading this passage anyone of us
could have written it
for to be human is to be common
as we can all relate,to the void conveyed here
well written
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Re: Atone Alone
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by Balmain_Tiger on
Thursday, 30th December 2010 @ 02:13:22 PM AEST
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Through life and at every stage when we blunder, atonement is all we have to set our path right again.
you have expressed this in a very clear tone |
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Re: Atone Alone
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by Aspirant on
Friday, 31st December 2010 @ 12:28:47 AM AEST
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| Your title... bothers me. To me, what you've described here is how one ends up feeling when one tries to do everything alone. Such pride will ultimately cave in the face of human weakness, the need for love and the help of others. The idea that personal atonement is the answer seems wrong to me, even to the point of dishonesty, where the person in question is afraid to admit their need for help and stubbornly holds to the belief in their own strength. The stronger and more stubborn one is, the more painful it becomes before one inevitably comes to accept weakness. |
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