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Spirals
Contributed by
duff
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Wednesday, 5th January 2011 @ 01:33:12 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Rented pillows cuddling chocolate
Balcony winds twisting through daisies
Eyes mourning sun drenched panes
Hands tremble disconnecting calls
Kerouac flashbacks and diner black
Sleepy bottles hide bedside faith
Ocean eyes broker a trade for pain
Medicating pressure to breathe again
Punctuality parallel to the velvet noose
Below marquis lights soul shakers snap
Youre a star waiting to shoot someone
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2011-01-05 01:33:12]
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Re: Spirals
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 6th January 2011 @ 02:06:34 AM AEST
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Hmmmm...it's definitely living up to the title, at least for me, as I can feel this "spiral" effect...even if I don't really understand it.
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Re: Spirals
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by northernlights on
Friday, 7th January 2011 @ 05:34:37 AM AEST
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| where do I start well i absolutely love and respect the way you write,and the depth of this writing is wonderful a whole onion of unravelling in imagery to be done whilst the whole picture unashamedly reflects your soul,this one I think is one of the rare writes attributed to a writer when they write in their own blood,a complete gamut of emotion from emptiness to inner struggle through pain to anger and then? |
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Re: Spirals
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by UNORTHODOX on
Saturday, 29th January 2011 @ 12:23:55 PM AEST
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A marvelous and intricate passage
the depths to which the human soul can spiral is beyond us
This write relative everyone
despair and emptiness are lonely dark places
where crutches are so inviting
the scene was depicted so thoroughly while it became so vivid to read
well versed,nicely delivered
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Re: Spirals
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by FlintHunter on
Wednesday, 28th September 2011 @ 01:02:35 PM AEST
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'Spirals' has received much well-deserved praise. Can i add anything to it? Well, I can say the poem ripped me apart and the last line really 'shot' through me; and that the images are so profound I think i could read this poem many many times before 'seeing' them all -- if ever I could do that. You have a special way with words. A style. You have a singular style.
--FlintHunter
Contributed by duff on Wednesday, January 05 2011 @ 01:33:12 AEST
Topic: Emotional Poetry
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