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Mesmerizing Eyes - Beware
Contributed by
Anoo
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Sunday, 13th February 2011 @ 10:00:48 AM in AEST
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Charming unmistakable eyes
Tempt me to write a few lines
Alluring as the azure skies
Telling the sweetest things but lies
Ever so discreetly whisper secrets that tantalize
For those concerned, heres my advice:
Before stare into those capturing eyes, think twice
Cause too long a gaze may inevitably hypnotize
Seeking no consent of yours, swiftly whisk you away to paradise
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Anoo
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Re: Mesmerizing Eyes - Beware
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by StacyLynnG on
Sunday, 13th February 2011 @ 10:24:02 AM AEST
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Very romantic!
Cause too long a gaze may inevitably hypnotize
Seeking no consent of yours, swiftly whisk you away to paradise
Love these lines! |
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Re: Mesmerizing Eyes - Beware
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by deusdeira on
Sunday, 13th February 2011 @ 11:00:07 AM AEST
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| That was a great way to describe the effect a person's eyes can have on you. :) |
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Re: Mesmerizing Eyes - Beware
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 14th February 2011 @ 12:51:16 AM AEST
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Charming unmistakable eyes
Tempt me to write a few lines
I absolutely love those lines. This is a sweet and beautiful write. I am guessing that you were unable to take your own advice and succumbed to the will of those eyes. 
May I make a suggestion, however. I think it would have sounded better if you used the word "staring" instead of stare. My guess is that your first language is not English so considering that, you did a great job. This really made me smile and I love the thoughts that inspired it.
Thank you,
Tim
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