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Eyes: (A Love, A Life, A Moment)
Contributed by
Frillycakes
on
Tuesday, 29th March 2011 @ 02:40:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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I have risen to defeat,
Awakened scorned by dreams,
And am broken by your eyes
With beauty you dispelled me
With grace you cast me out
With pity you expelled me
I will never understand
The great power of your eyes
I will never feel again
The emotion in those eyes
I will never forget the
bright wonders of your eyes
For within your lovely face
I found love in a moment
Despite newly broken heart
With beauty you dispelled me
With grace you cast me out
With pity you expelled me
A love, a life, a moment
Without time to stop and think
I awoke without her gaze
A love, a life, a moment
A torment for eternity
Now wasted on memory
Copyright ©
Frillycakes
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2011-03-29 14:40:15]
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Re: Eyes: (A Love, A Life, A Moment)
(User Rating: 1 )
by poeticjestix on
Tuesday, 29th March 2011 @ 03:56:24 PM AEST
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| the eyes have it |
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Re: Eyes: (A Love, A Life, A Moment)
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by Frillycakes on
Tuesday, 29th March 2011 @ 04:05:31 PM AEST
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| Haha, yeah. ain't it amazing? |
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Re: Eyes: (A Love, A Life, A Moment)
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by NightOwl61 on
Tuesday, 29th March 2011 @ 09:19:14 PM AEST
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nifty little write. Wonderfully vivid, especially when one puts much weight in the view of another. You captured that well in your words here. I'm think the repetition of the lines: "With beauty you dispelled me
With grace you cast me out
With pity you expelled me " are unnecessary though. The poem would read right well without the repeat. Thanks for sharing.
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Re: Eyes: (A Love, A Life, A Moment)
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by huwbeauty on
Wednesday, 30th March 2011 @ 02:26:28 AM AEST
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| A moving and nicely written poem.I especially like the last verse. |
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