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Another one of your jokes
Contributed by
Jilli_bean
on
Sunday, 27th April 2003 @ 10:35:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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everyday same routine
its easy to follow
ya you talk to me
as if i am hollow
I try to be serious
but its hard
could you keep functioning
with your heart charred
The giggle the eyeroll (and i thought it was just a teenage thing)
with every slip of my tongue
sould have learned
if only I hadn't sung
Abuse, peer pressure, rape
not my issue
seriously could care less
"bo,ho" give me a tissue
its a been there done that type thing
sad thoughts, dying
they consumed me
they began o naw away at me sanity
gee?
but....
for you it's funny
this isn't real
well, to me it hurts
don't deny, please don't ; it hurts to feel
This foolish game begans to tire me
I have grown weak
maybe i shouldn't be here
why is my voice so meak
what am i forgetting
what's missing?
the world wasn't to mean
infact, the oppisite, quite rissing ( a made up word i created...seeemed to fit)
not really sure what they will say
but then again...wont matter
no longer will they laugh to my eyes
after i am gone they will not chatter
but then again maybe they will
their eyes cold and dark
me lying cold, dead, and lifeless, in a coffin
I finally did it, i made my mark
there will be no snickering
just their angry thoughts of dispair
they all laughed, now i laugh alone
and for all thouse who say its just not fair
you didn't even know me
so don't waste a precious tear
I have already cried all i can cry
this is what has developed
never to be tormented again
after all i was just another one of your jokes
Copyright ©
Jilli_bean
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2003-04-27 22:35:00]
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Re: Another one of your jokes
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by TheSpiritx on
Monday, 28th April 2003 @ 02:58:18 AM AEST
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Hey :)
A few comments:
1) Don't worry about whether people argue that your poem "glorifies suicide." Your poetry is your own... they can't say what you can write or not write. :)
2) It was a little hard to follow.. the parentheses made it a tad confusing... but,
overall, it was a good perspective style poem. Thanks for sharing, jilli. |
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Re: Another one of your jokes
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 28th April 2003 @ 09:03:34 AM AEST
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I totally agree with the comment above. It doesn't matter what others say about your poetry. It is your work and if they don't like it - they don't have to read it.
secondly, I agree that it was a bit confusing but the underlying theme of despair and not feeling understood was there the whole way through.
I really enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.
sleepless_siren |
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Re: Another one of your jokes
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by stargazer on
Monday, 28th April 2003 @ 10:01:46 PM AEST
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Jillian, you know I love your work. I am ALWAYS going to be your biggest fan! I love your work and it is very real and very true to everyday life. Its not just like, 'the grass is green and people are mean". I mean people can really relate to your words, even though sometimes it comes off angry but anger is good. Especially when someone needs help. Don't ever let anyone change you or tell you, you are not good enough because you are the biggest.
Your biggest fan and your little nerd.... Amy |
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Re: Another one of your jokes
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Tuesday, 29th April 2003 @ 07:27:28 PM AEST
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I liked this poem, the spelling knida got me a little lossed, but I just corrected those in my mind.
I never listen to those that only want to hurt, well not anymore :( this is a very sad write.
You have done well with this theme. |
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