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Visible with Hidden pain.
Contributed by
CommasCanSeperate
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Tuesday, 28th June 2011 @ 09:23:28 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Its not something I usually write about
its something people can already see
But I try so hard to keep going and pretending
Thats its not there, not effecting me.
I battle past it with smiles and cheek
And I forget about it all
But nothing works, nothings working
Just another fail.
It makes me feel dirty, disgusting
I am never quite clean
I can scrub and place chemicals upon chemicals
But still this major flaw is seen.
I guess something its better than others
Then another fierce attack
Something I can think that its all gone
I look in the mirror and it comes flooding back.
It devours at my skin
With its claws full of heavy poison
I try to fight it, I try so hard
Again, I lost, it won.
Numerous thing I have tried
To feel happy and confident
I just want to look beautiful, feel clean
Just for one moment.
Nobody knows it affects me that much
Nobody knows about the pain
The physical throbbing, the mentally draining
I just want it all away
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CommasCanSeperate
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Re: Visible with Hidden pain.
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by northernlights on
Thursday, 30th June 2011 @ 03:58:49 AM AEST
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| Very difficult and very personal subject to write about. I think you have voiced the pain and the suffering and the problems with self esteem in such a way though that as with all good poetry that comes from personal life experience, it can bring at the very least some understanding and empathy for anyone else going through the same and hopefully better understanding to all who have read your poem. |
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Re: Visible with Hidden pain.
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 1st July 2011 @ 06:41:41 AM AEST
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You've taken what is clearly a very difficult thing for you to deal with and laid it bare for all the world to see.
It's never easy living with something that people don't consider the norm, they don't always realise that behind the eyes there is still a real person there.
Maybe people will read this and understand a little better.
Steve |
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