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Hidden pastures
Contributed by
iodinelove
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Tuesday, 12th July 2011 @ 01:55:46 PM in AEST
Topic:
abstract
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3 a.m.
I am awake
In my heart I see
Walking alone across the moonlight
The stars/ the hidden pastures of her skin
Burst open
Rearranged, choreographed
Lilting just above
Fresh cut grass
Still, descending; still again
Then rising, fluttering
Toward the tree line/ toward the streetlights
Until dissipated
Until gone.
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iodinelove
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Re: Hidden pastures
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by Deidra_Carmichael on
Tuesday, 12th July 2011 @ 03:12:23 PM AEST
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Congratulations you have successfully posted a creative and interesting write! The extended metaphor I must say Is very effective and enjoyable to read about; the hidden pastures of her skin- now that is creative. Take care and God bless,
Deidra |
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Re: Hidden pastures
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 12th July 2011 @ 06:00:32 PM AEST
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Well hello aBe, Good work as always.
huggs, blessings |
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Re: Hidden pastures
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by ming on
Friday, 15th July 2011 @ 11:56:05 AM AEST
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The longing I feel while reading this...ahhh.
'hidden pastures of her skin
Burst open
Rearranged, choreographed
Lilting just above
Fresh cut grass
Still, descending; still again
Then rising, fluttering
Toward the tree line/ toward the streetlights
Until dissipated
Until gone.'
Thanks for sharing.
ming
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Re: Hidden pastures
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by deusdeira on
Monday, 25th July 2011 @ 03:47:52 PM AEST
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| I love metaphors, and I love this poem. Well done! |
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