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fever
Contributed by
poeticjestix
on
Saturday, 16th July 2011 @ 11:45:41 AM in AEST
Topic:
ambiguous
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Fever soaks the brain
my soul is released
thoughts are so insane
they must come from the beast
I fall into a world
where marvels do exist
angelic hell unfurled
within an eerie mist
too tired to lose my temper
too gone to notice why
these thoughts are not remembered
In and out am I
a sweating rightful wrong
throughout I am exhausted
this torture lasts so long
repeats as if Im ghosted
answer within my grasp
as I speak to my maker
Ringing hurts. I grasp,
wake up and shout potato
bright, alive & fresh
it's a beautiful day
apart from crusty tissues
all will be okay
I tap the ringing screen
oops! I just hit snooze
out cold in an instant
to somewhere I can't choose.
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poeticjestix
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2011-07-16 11:45:41]
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Re: fever
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by UNORTHODOX on
Saturday, 16th July 2011 @ 11:24:01 PM AEST
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A wonderful description of fever
it's almost as if you had the fever while writting this
to depict it so well
and metaphorically this piece was astounding
I can appreciate the depth layers
nicely conveyed
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