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I Promise.
Contributed by
CommasCanSeperate
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Thursday, 18th August 2011 @ 09:01:49 AM in AEST
Topic:
AngryPoetry
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I wish to crucify you to the ground Till you can hardly breath And look down at your eyes As you lay there and heave I want to drop my weight upon you And keep you held right there And tease and torture you As you are lying bare And pin you face, side to the ground And spit fire into your ear Make every hair stand on end With something more than fear I will tangle and torch your emotions I will set you mentally up in flames Watch the smoke settle in those eyes And light you up all over again This violent treatment is what you deserve For promises you could never keep But now my dirty little secret, I have you I promise, you wont leave me.
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Re: I Promise.
(User Rating: 1 ) by bigj on
Thursday, 18th August 2011 @ 10:07:47 PM AEST (User
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To express dark emotions so vividly is wonderful. Love the write, even though it's twisted and dark, but aren't we all when we live In anger, we may not express it, but we do think it.
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Re: I Promise.
(User Rating: 1 ) by poeticjestix on
Friday, 19th August 2011 @ 02:24:03 PM AEST (User
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what is this? a job application for a care worker in a childrens home.
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Re: I Promise.
(User Rating: 1 ) by poeticjestix on
Friday, 19th August 2011 @ 02:28:25 PM AEST (User
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Please accept My apologies. This is dark and angry and well put together |
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Re: I Promise.
(User Rating: 1 ) by Aspirant on
Sunday, 21st August 2011 @ 12:34:01 AM AEST (User
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No, I don't quite know those moods, which makes this write all the more interesting to me. |
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Re: I Promise.
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 18th October 2011 @ 03:33:14 AM AEST (User
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i'm glad i'm not the only one who gets in these dark moods!! i know what you mean. i really liked this poem. you have talent. you get your feelings out, and put them in the places they should be in. |
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