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Each day's the same.
Contributed by
huwbeauty
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Sunday, 23rd October 2011 @ 01:43:02 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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Some might say, Im obsessed,
Now Ive regressed, to you once more,
But pon reflection, your perfection,
Is the one thing, of which Im sure.
Each days the same,
I wake, repeat your name,
Stake my claim, to loneliness,
Struggle through, this wilderness,
With the knowledge, I caused this,
Cause I lied to, or deluded myself,
Contrived, Ive tried,
So hard to forget,
But with regret,
The things I said,
Those thoughts I shed,
Taunt me it seems,
Still haunt my dreams.
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huwbeauty
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2011-10-23 13:43:02]
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Re: Each day's the same.
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by Banda5k1 on
Sunday, 23rd October 2011 @ 05:33:30 PM AEST
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| The rhymes feel way too forced, almost as if you took a book of rhyming words and just tried to make a poem using the first few you found... Keep at it, it's a good try maybe try expressing your feelings more naturally next time. |
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