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THE LAST HORSE
Contributed by
FlintHunter
on
Friday, 28th October 2011 @ 06:01:14 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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b''h
16 February, 2011 r2
THE LAST HORSE
THE SKY WAS BLUE -- the clouds white --
The sun was yellow -- of course --
To all eyes a perfect day
It was -- and the perfect night
Would be soon -- moon in its course
Stars shining winding their way
Along accustomed paths --
And so too the blank planets
Rolling their routes around
Whatever they go around:
The galaxy -- the universe --
The solar-system -- the Milky Way --
What careless things bestow light
Upon Earth! Earth! The last horse
Galloping into the last day.
__________________
Flint Hunter (2011)
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Re: THE LAST HORSE
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by KHANVICT on
Friday, 28th October 2011 @ 09:17:08 AM AEST
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| I really like this one Flint. EARTH! the last horse galloping into the last day. It has a real strong impact. Keep it up. PEACE |
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Re: THE LAST HORSE
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by ammar on
Sunday, 30th October 2011 @ 10:29:39 AM AEST
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A poem with fine imagery and an interesting rhyme scheme. The internal rhyme 'soon -- moon' was very effective. I also much admire the play on the word 'course', using it in a completely different sense in the second tercet. You do use these poetic devices very skillfully.
Keep writing
Peace
Ammar
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