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in transit
Contributed by
essential
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Friday, 28th October 2011 @ 03:14:06 PM in AEST
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oops
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I follow the stairs that lift from the ground
To where I was told my wisdom lies
My footsteps make a lonely sound
What my face bravely denies
I'm going, but not going up
Like walking an escalator in reverse
I don't know what is waiting at the top
But I'm sure it cannot be adverse
With an effort I reach the top of the stairs
But there's no wisdom to make me see
I walked this way unawares
And this way wasn't meant for me
After all I came to the wrong place
Despite high hopes and humps so tall
But as I see my aim I stop chasing
And maybe this is wisdom after all.
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Re: in transit
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 28th October 2011 @ 03:21:55 PM AEST
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Something that really stands out in this poem for me are the lines:
I'm going, but not going up
Like walking an escalator in reverse.
That to me just captures frustration perfectly.
I liked the way you made everything flow.
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Re: in transit
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by duff on
Tuesday, 8th November 2011 @ 06:12:26 AM AEST
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I really like this piece...chasing what we believe is our destiny only to find that we are seeking the wrong answers in the wrong places...our determination sets a course and sometimes it's difficult to alter that path...excellent work
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