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No Excuses
Contributed by
angelus8663
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Thursday, 15th December 2011 @ 10:54:59 AM in AEST
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Its just plain wrong, there is no excuse,
To batter someones body, for domestic abuse.
It doesnt make you a man, or to your friends, very cool,
It just makes you a thug, nothing but a damn fool.
She covers the welts, with make-up and concealer,
As her husband turns from drink, to the nearest street dealer.
She walked into something, she fell down the stairs,
She dies a little inside, whenever someone stares.
She tells all these lies, to protect herself from harm,
Just longs for him to be sober; to remain calm.
Hes perpetually angry and bitter inside
He tortures her body, her soul and her mind.
Why dont you just leave him? Her friends long to ask,
She could never explain how its an insurmountable task.
Shes sure that hell find her, if ever she leaves,
Hed take it too far, her kids be left to grieve.
To all of the women who suffer this trial,
Please dont go on, dont live in denial.
There are shelters and groups, people who care,
Dont hide the bruises, lay your soul bare.
And to all of the men who think its alright,
Why dont you be a man; try someone who can put up a fight.
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angelus8663
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2011-12-15 10:54:59]
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Re: No Excuses
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by aliopterix on
Thursday, 15th December 2011 @ 11:28:02 AM AEST
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| A very emotive and difficult subject to attempt. You have acquitted yourself in spades. The rhyming scheme and metre are excellent and the piece reads well. The stark portrayal of the subjugated female lends great credence to the poem and anyone with a history of domestic violence will be able to empathise with this easily I feel sure. Bold and brilliant - bravo! Al. |
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Re: No Excuses
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by steppingstones on
Friday, 16th December 2011 @ 02:34:56 AM AEST
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| Wow! This is really powerful, and most certainly a very hard and intricate topic to handle, but you did with such care. It was really an inspiring poem that proves the complexity within domestic abuse homes. Good job :) |
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