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Drowning in Dust
Contributed by
deusdeira
on
Thursday, 19th January 2012 @ 02:26:40 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Don't come with me along this path,
for i see that you fear...
these subtle things that hide behind...
a whisper or a tear,
a tear that breaks upon the ground,
leaving ripples in the dust,
and like the dust evades the tear,
our minds refuse to trust,
for broken dreams belong in dust,
where no forgiveness lives,
and into dust... I will not march,
without the love you give,
the clocks have stopped and tick no more,
for time has found his match,
this broken, beaten, hollow man,
that love could never catch.
Copyright ©
deusdeira
... [
2012-01-19 02:26:40]
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Re: Drowning in Dust
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by sararawr on
Thursday, 19th January 2012 @ 12:10:57 PM AEST
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This is an amazing poem.
It really caught me attention.
It reminds me of how I feel. |
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Re: Drowning in Dust
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by discov on
Thursday, 19th January 2012 @ 12:55:17 PM AEST
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| very well written. |
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Re: Drowning in Dust
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by xHeathenx on
Thursday, 19th January 2012 @ 07:29:18 PM AEST
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Very Nice! I tell you, love may not have caught this man, but this poem sure did. Haha, love the imagery, and the beauty in such a topic, with such a simplistic idea... A drop of liquid in dirt being spread apart.
I just wonder what the title relates or pertains to, as I don't see someone drowning here, unless you mean drowning in distrust, or the tear that fell being enveloped in dust and being drowing in that sense. |
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Re: Drowning in Dust
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 13th March 2012 @ 10:30:08 AM AEST
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This is my theme song!!!! Brilliant writing.
The first stanza drips with sarcasm....well, at least for me it does.
Thanks,
Tim |
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Re: Drowning in Dust
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by Natkingcole on
Saturday, 14th April 2012 @ 11:51:24 AM AEST
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| This poem screams despair but also a sense of fulfilment towards the end, very good poem |
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