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Mist and Vapor
Contributed by
shelby
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Friday, 20th April 2012 @ 02:06:24 AM in AEST
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I shall rise once more
in the mist and vapor.
The vapor of your tears
that you wept for me for so long.
Divide the world in half,
by day and by darkness.
Moon reflections in my eyes
of all the years I've seen.
Lust shall overcome us,
free to walk the winds.
Freedom from the bondage
atonement for our sin.
There will be no more pain.
Sunrise wont burn our eyes.
The moment of day-walkers
shall once again rise.....
by light of a hallow blue moon
and the mist and vapor
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shelby
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2012-04-20 02:06:24]
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Re: Mist and Vapor
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by emystar on
Friday, 20th April 2012 @ 04:29:24 AM AEST
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God writing.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Mist and Vapor
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by thehotshotpoet on
Friday, 20th April 2012 @ 09:56:18 AM AEST
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another good write thanks for sharing
the hot shot poet |
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Re: Mist and Vapor
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by doug on
Friday, 20th April 2012 @ 11:36:02 AM AEST
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| Nice. I love all things vampire. That being said I have strong opinions on the best rules for vampires such as Coppola's version of Dracula was the best where the count could walk in sunlight , however , it was not his natural time , being nocturnal , and he was severely reduced in his powers. Also the count can become mist and become a wolf though not a bat.. that's a bit hokey. Don't get me started on the Twilight sparkling in sunlight thing. Ugghhh. I'm sorry but vampires don't glitter...not in my book! Anyways you're prolly thinking...o...k what's that to do with my poem. I don't know you just got me to thinking with the return to sunlight idea. Great work... so glad you liked mine. keep writing... especially dark stuff. truly , doug |
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Re: Mist and Vapor
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 20th April 2012 @ 12:27:49 PM AEST
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I'm with Doug on the glittering crap. Glittering vampyrs...pffft. What does this have to with your poem, nuttin honey. He just got me thinking too as I like the idea of day walkers. The entire idea of the walking dead is a bit ludicrous anyway but I love the fantasy, the stories and this poem.
Bring more!!! |
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Re: Mist and Vapor
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by deusdeira on
Monday, 30th April 2012 @ 06:00:22 PM AEST
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I really liked this line:
"I shall rise once more
in the mist and vapor.
The vapor of your tears"
This line is very metaphoric, and also very beautiful and original. I love anything that is a metaphor, and I love it even more if it is beautiful :) |
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