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Black Beast
Contributed by
Breezy
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Wednesday, 25th April 2012 @ 09:39:33 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Miles of open water, glistening like eyes fixed on the spark of a flame
spreading out across endless anticipation
a preoccupation of conceived conception,
though it would hardly be the sweet intoxication that
sleepless nights with an ear pressed to a phone had awakened
voracious necessity swelled
and thoughts of having someone to stay up with
circled in the air leaving traces of colour
and fuelled the appetite that
infiltrated the iron doors beneath my breast
the attitude of circumstance warmed the soul
as a cloudless sky, mid-summer
but with no warning cry of bird nor man
the air swarmed with an angry black surge of mist and thunder
filling the vault of desperation with antipathy
you ...
disappear
leaving only the confusion and regret
indigenous to indifference in your wake
and as your appeasing last words
search for explanation behind your cowardice,
time forgives ...
but it moves too slow .....
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Copyright ©
Breezy
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2012-04-25 21:39:33]
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Re: Black Beast
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by shelby on
Thursday, 26th April 2012 @ 01:16:09 AM AEST
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So intently moving Roxi. I have so missed your poetry...... I hope you are ok??
Hugs you
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Re: Black Beast
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by emystar on
Thursday, 26th April 2012 @ 03:55:53 AM AEST
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Good work friend.
Blessings, huggs,
emy |
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Re: Black Beast
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 26th April 2012 @ 07:02:12 AM AEST
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*takes the first two lines of the second stanza and claims them as his own* :p
I'm not sure if time moves too slow are altogether stops sometimes, even with a feeling of going backwards to the beginning. Meh! :(
I got so much more to say but I looked up at the clock and realized I gotta get going. Stupid work! ;-)
Leaves with the feeling he never wants to be in a relationship again.
Awesome poems as usual from you ...as if a memory.
Buh bye for now.
Timathon
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Re: Black Beast
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by Raggie on
Thursday, 26th April 2012 @ 10:45:58 AM AEST
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| Really, really enjoyed it. Ooh I know some of the places you describe. Thank you:) |
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Re: Black Beast
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by ShaeBay on
Thursday, 26th April 2012 @ 02:32:57 PM AEST
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Wow. The intensity just radiates off of this piece. I really enjoyed the image this created for me while reading.
Lovely write,
Shae |
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Re: Black Beast
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by doug on
Thursday, 26th April 2012 @ 03:36:17 PM AEST
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| " The air swarmed with an angry black surge of mist and thunder" I hate to pick just one line but I love that one. Mist and thunder are two of my favorite things. Sorry so short but must go. Excellent as always , truly , Doug |
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Re: Black Beast
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by thehotshotpoet on
Friday, 27th April 2012 @ 02:25:16 PM AEST
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nice read thanks for sharing
the hot shot poet |
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Re: Black Beast
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by deusdeira on
Saturday, 28th April 2012 @ 01:57:12 AM AEST
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| Brilliant! Flowing, eloquent, and moving! I especially loved the second stanza! So true as well... time often does move too slow, and when forgiveness does come, it is often too late. Such is life. |
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Re: Black Beast
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by needledancing on
Wednesday, 13th March 2013 @ 08:18:29 AM AEST
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| It has been too long since I have read your phenomenal writings and oh my lord how you have leaped and grown into great style. Your descriptive,emotional use of words reaches right to soul and puts us into the experience of it all.Excellent right ...what can I say?ND |
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Re: Black Beast
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 26th April 2014 @ 03:29:46 PM AEST
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i have always loved your mind rox,
this one is wicked enchanting,
hugs n' love nessa |
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