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Rescue
Contributed by
Elia
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Tuesday, 12th June 2012 @ 11:54:38 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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In the cold sea, I lay.
In life drowning slowly.
Giving up on the day,
Wait for the end only.
Till on a bright ship,
Or maybe a cloud,
Someone making a trip.
A gentle soul, not proud.
the waters, they did rip.
Out of the water I fly,
Out of the deep dispair.
Cloak of empathy to dry,
And the warmth of someone to care.
Copyright ©
Elia
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2012-06-12 23:54:38]
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Re: Rescue
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 13th June 2012 @ 01:24:40 AM AEST
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A bit ambiguous but that is not a bad thing. I like ambiguous. Sorta jumped around like a dream. :)
I think most of us...especially us that be poets, understand the longing for the " warmth of someone to care."
My best advice (always) is to write more for you than anyone else. It's your poetry, make it yours. Write how you think it should be written and don't try and fall into what others think what poetry should be.
I often wondered if e.e. cummings or John Keats, Shakespeare, or E.A.P. concerned themselves over the rules of poetry.
Take care,
Tim
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Re: Rescue
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by geordie on
Wednesday, 13th June 2012 @ 09:21:48 AM AEST
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| I found this quite amusing i don't know if it was supposed to be and quite profound |
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Re: Rescue
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by PreciousKitten on
Wednesday, 13th June 2012 @ 07:24:52 PM AEST
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| I liked the poem it was very deep yet understanding. keep writing |
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