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The need for a prayer
Contributed by
thehotshotpoet
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Sunday, 19th August 2012 @ 02:28:32 PM in AEST
Topic:
InspirationalPoems
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where I live in Florida
it's been Raining everyday
while California & Washington
needs the rain to come there way
Idaho is now in the path
of this devistating fire
they are being told to leave their homes
leaving nothing to desire
to just walk away from all they know
I find it very sad
they work all their lives to make a home
to lose everything they had
threw this countries tragic nightmares
what there dreams were all made of
you will survive this tragedy
with the one's you love
our hearts & prayers go out to you
& wishes for the rain to soak
to help you stop the fire's
& vaporize the smoke
I know it's hard to do
but hold your head up high
it shows all your not defeated
& noone will question why
I know it's taking all you have
with all that you must do
I know the whole world is now praying
& they are coming straight to you
sincerely
the hot shot poet
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Re: The need for a prayer
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by FragileStrength on
Wednesday, 29th August 2012 @ 06:30:26 PM AEST
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| It is great to know that you keep people you don't know in your prayers. And you are absolutely right, everyone needed to pray for them. But so many people's first reaction are "thank goodness that's not me", so I think it's wonderful that you saw the need to point out what the correct reaction is. And to your poem, I like the rhyme scheme, and I don't use a strict meter with my poems so I won't say you should one. And I think because of that your poem rose and fell like waves. It was great. |
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