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Sun or Thunder
Contributed by
xHeathenx
on
Sunday, 27th January 2013 @ 06:43:23 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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At night when I drop the curtains
As the spotlight grows dim
With the cast departed
After a soft and silent hymn
I drop the blinds as well
To keep out the whispers of the sun
To deny sight to her nozy neighbor
Who lives across the street
To silence the cries of thunder
Because no matter the voice
No matter the words
The voice is never hers
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Re: Sun or Thunder
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by deusdeira on
Saturday, 27th April 2013 @ 07:00:39 PM AEST
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This poem is beautiful.
It makes me wonder what the sun is whispering. Perhaps it is an analogy for sunlight, or perhaps the sun is your happiness. Or a friend... or a lover. "To silence the cries of thunder" perhaps to try to heal or move on... or maybe literal thunder. But what of the lightning? :)
And the last lines...
"no matter the words, the voice is never hers"
It reminds me of a person who says things but only because they are supposed to, and not because they actually mean them. Or perhaps you silence the thunder because they will never be her. So many possibilities. Wonderful write. You know how much i love abstract. |
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Re: Sun or Thunder
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 23rd February 2015 @ 10:01:29 PM AEST
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Layered, abstract, wonderfulness! Your word choice gives me many ideas as to their meaning. The beginning makes me think of taking off the 'mask' at the end of the day...Home alone, away from the rest of the cast, you can drop the pretense. The second stanza comes across as denial, or being maybe aware that all is not well, and not wanting any outsider to see the same thing. The third and final stanza; first- To silence the cries of thunder...What an intriguing thought. That final stanza is the meat and potatoes. The real story is summed up so perfectly in those last 5 words.
Brilliant.
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Re: Sun or Thunder
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 25th February 2015 @ 07:10:48 PM AEST
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This reminds me of a conversation I had with a dear friend about "cherishing our solitude". Go home and just get away from it all and all of them.
Nicely done.
Tim |
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Re: Sun or Thunder
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by Invierno on
Sunday, 29th March 2015 @ 09:00:24 AM AEST
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Evocative and well constructed. The words paint a portrait of a mood, or setting, or both. I like it quite a lot.
Thanks for the music links. I will listen to them all today as I go about my work and ramblings.
Cool getting with you.
Invierno |
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