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the Seduction
Contributed by
softerware
on
Wednesday, 8th January 2014 @ 12:57:06 AM in AEST
Topic:
Nostalgic
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Young and pretty;
Smart and gritty!
Shes no lady of the city!
(Needs no paint to make her pretty!)
A country girl who loves her leather,
Lightning storms and summer weather;
Weve shared walks and memories
of winding roads and autumn trees.
Huddled from the pouring rain;
In the sweet straw we have lain.
Still she mocks me every day;
And makes it clear she will not stay!
Shes my freedom-loving dancer,
You can call, but she wont answer!
Toss her head and turn her shoulder;
Lucky YOU to get to hold her!
Swings her hips and walks away:
Youve nothing that she wants today!
But I have sweets with which to bid her;
Knowing she will reconsider!
I brought gifts, Oh, Baby, please..
(Begging now, Im on my knees).
Warm and steamy, she approaches,
stealthily my space encroaches,
Brush my cheek with velvet lips,
Nudge me with a swaying hip;
I feel her breathing soft upon me; lovely Ladyfair!
She lets me slip her bridal on, astride her body bare,
we'll ride across our meadow, and on to who knows where.
Copyright ©
softerware
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2014-01-08 00:57:06]
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Re: the Seduction
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by JonnyDufourPoetry101 on
Wednesday, 8th January 2014 @ 04:42:40 AM AEST
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| Good |
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Re: the Seduction
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 8th January 2014 @ 11:47:19 PM AEST
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Whoa Wilbur!
Love it. |
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Re: the Seduction
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by emystar on
Thursday, 9th January 2014 @ 09:20:26 PM AEST
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Very beautiful and awesome.
smiles,
emy |
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Re: the Seduction
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by deusdeira on
Saturday, 11th January 2014 @ 04:44:41 PM AEST
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| lol i cant stop picturing a bridal being put on a woman. That being said... a very romantic poem :) |
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Re: the Seduction
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 2nd February 2014 @ 12:31:41 PM AEST
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This is awesome! I love being caught off-guard with an ending. Not only does this flow very smoothly, it is delivered with a sly, tongue-in-cheek style that seems to befit this lovely horse. Very well done!!
~Scorp |
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Re: the Seduction
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 7th March 2014 @ 07:36:46 AM AEST
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| Excellent!! I love writing poems with twists like this so I wasn't caught off guard. This was well executed! |
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Re: the Seduction
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 14th May 2014 @ 06:51:39 PM AEST
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ooooh this is beautiful, i thought it was a horse
'cause i raised them, this was nostalgic for me
for sure, crap now i want a horse again,
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: the Seduction
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by Invierno on
Friday, 16th May 2014 @ 07:47:54 AM AEST
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softerware, hello, my friend. How nice to read this on a fine sunny morning. Soft and embracing...got my 'tender groove' flowing, then- BAM! "Still she mocks me every day; And makes it clear she will not stay!"
Needle up, groove gone. Cool! the shake-up is a jolt and I like jolts...life is a turning record more than it should be, so why not jiggle the needle, eh?
The balance of the piece brought to mind a most excellent rendition of a Willie Nelson song, "She's not for you". While for the most part I prefer the original artist to any cover attempt, in this song, performed by the cover artist, he elevates the song beyond Willie's original. It encapsulates your beautiful poem in essence. I hope you listen to it. Link below.
Thank you for your fine contribution to the poetic collective. I've come to incorporate my morning routine with a visit to YPDC as requisite to starting my day. I look for you and four or five other artists, and spend a little more time gem hunting amongst the rocks.
Blessings,
Invierno
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xsrS6u_fu5Y |
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