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A Breath and Tears (undone)
Contributed by
wachumiri
on
Sunday, 9th March 2014 @ 11:11:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Midnight gazes at the earth
Illuminates a mist
A wisp of smoke
Yet I see a ghost
My mind telling me
Youre here
Or maybe its my heart
That whispers your name
To my soul
My soul reaches out
And I raise my eyes to see
You disappear
My heart beats a hollow beat
Not blood
But numb feeling
Races through my veins
Cascades
Breaks this masquerade
And shatters at my feet
As my heartbeats shatter my ears
That listen for your name
A sound Ill never hear
You disappear
My heart beats an empty beat
And blood
With no feeling
Seeps through my veins
Another small part of me
Slips down my cheek
Cascades
Broken masquerade
It shatters at my feet
I feel the shards
Caress
And rip my flesh
But I reject
This dark embrace
I miss your touch
But as cold mist
Whispers your lips to mine
A gentle breeze
A hurricane to me
Pushes you away
And I feel you
As slowly
You disappear
My heart breathes a gentle beat
Slow blood
Too much feeling
Flows through my veins
A heartbeat parts with me
Slips down my cheek
Cascades
No masquerade
It shatters at my feet
But midnight breeze
Brings scent of roses
The tempest before the rain
The silent storm
The tension torn sky
Brings me the scent of you
So close
But thunder breaks the spell
And raindrops fall
You disappear
My heart beats uneven beats
My blood
All Im feeling
Coursing through my veins
Every last part of me
Slips down my cheek
Cascades
Ends all masquerade
Soul shatters at my feet
It blends with the raindrops
Almost forgotten
In this crushing reality of grief
I lift my eyes
Among the shower of stars
A gift of the moon
That hides my pain
I blend in the rain
And plead for you
And midnights tears
Fall on my lips
And I taste your lips
Your sweetness
So complete
But suddenly youre ripped away
Your lips torn from mine
And lightning lights the empty space
Im left with
Emptiness
That confirms
You disappear
And as I see
My fading love
And as I hear
Your whispered name
And as I feel
Your touch dissolve
And as I smell
Your scent die out
And as your taste
Just disappears
I seek
I find
I sojourn far
Drenched I dance in the embrace
Of rain, of pictures in my head
Of feelings torn
And shattered heart
In the embrace
Of soul so dark
And broken spirit, broken pace
Heartbeats echo broken phrase
Im broken without you
Copyright ©
wachumiri
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2014-03-09 23:11:55]
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Re: A Breath and Tears (undone)
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by shelby on
Monday, 10th March 2014 @ 03:55:21 PM AEST
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Beautiful written poem,the pen and heart touched in blue.I hope you are ok?
Hugs you tight
Michelle |
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Re: A Breath and Tears (undone)
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 10th March 2014 @ 07:46:37 PM AEST
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You skillfully pen the deep cutting emotion of losing someone dear...least that's what I got out of it.
I also liked the variables on the repeating stanzas. Yes indeedy!
Thank you for an enjoyable heartfelt poem.
Tim |
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Re: A Breath and Tears (undone)
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by softerware on
Monday, 10th March 2014 @ 11:48:17 PM AEST
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I love the repetition and imagery you used here. Some stunning phrases "tension torn sky" "shower of stars" "drenched I dance in the embrace of rain" ..you make love to the language.
Most beautiful in it's lingering sadness.
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Re: A Breath and Tears (undone)
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by Breezy on
Wednesday, 19th March 2014 @ 10:41:29 PM AEST
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oh heavens! That last line ruptured me.
But this whole piece, D, is just . . .damn. I can't
even articulate the emotion that it evokes. Such
exquisite pain. I must return to this . .
when I have found the words to express how
this moved me, I will.
Incredibly beautiful and agonizing all at the once.
Wonderful writing, poet. Wonderful.
~ Breezy
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Re: A Breath and Tears (undone)
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 12th April 2014 @ 03:36:43 PM AEST
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this is so beautifully sad, heart wrenching, one of the best written through sadness i've read;
it strikes the reader in the heart,
loosing someone is like a death even if its not death, hang in there,
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: A Breath and Tears (undone)
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 16th December 2014 @ 03:54:55 PM AEST
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Heartbroken never sounded so eloquent. Well done!!
As always, your poetry is rich with emotion and imagery.
Good to see you visiting ypdc. :)
~Scorp |
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Re: A Breath and Tears (undone)
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by Archie on
Thursday, 6th August 2015 @ 03:57:52 PM AEST
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| I like that the repetition shows so much emotion. This is why I read poetry; its joy and betrayal shows how much we have in common. |
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Re: A Breath and Tears (undone)
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by Tiny_Tina on
Tuesday, 12th February 2019 @ 05:43:02 AM AEST
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| sad ,:( |
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