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Days Gone By
Contributed by
JacobJowers
on
Tuesday, 22nd April 2014 @ 07:20:58 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Repent
For which the days to come
Descend
The light has long been gone.
Destroy
What has been lost
Fight
Only for the cost.
Live
For the dark to be seen
Die
For your queen.
Cry
To be heard
Bribe
Those that are teared.
Days
Have ended
Lives
Long since been bended.
Copyright ©
JacobJowers
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2014-04-22 07:20:58]
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Re: Days Gone By
(User Rating: 1 )
by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 22nd April 2014 @ 08:27:34 AM AEST
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I might've missed the rhyme "scheme", I saw a couple of words that rhymed, but no scheme per say. Perhaps that is what you meant?
I do like where you are going with this, and the stand-alone words to set up the following line. This reminds me of one of my older writes, very similar in style and content.
Nice job here!
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Re: Days Gone By
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by dvtpdw on
Wednesday, 23rd April 2014 @ 02:47:29 PM AEST
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| I think "rhyme scheme" is like poets - to each the words will be unique. I like the imagery and the flow of your words. Intense point said with strength of words. Great write, P |
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