|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
Aurora
Contributed by
Natedog
on
Monday, 2nd June 2014 @ 05:27:30 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
|
Aurora
The day I met you was a day so great, it felt so good to just to see your face. When I am with you can feel my knees shake, like I'm about to tumble down off the Empire State. I wanna hold you close and call you mine, you are my everything, my sparkling dime. I'm so selfish because I want you to myself, I couldn't bare to see you with anyone els. Looking into your eyes, there isn't a prettier sight, I just makes me want to stare all night. Your beauty is ever so graceful, when I date you I promise to be faithful. You are a shinning star in the night sky, so bright and filled with light. Me and you will make it last, because we know each others past.
natedog, PLEASE: To help keep this site INTERACTIVE, please read and comment on at least 3 poems by our other authors for each one you submit.
Copyright ©
Natedog
... [
2014-06-02 17:27:30]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: Aurora
(User Rating: 1 )
by ladyfawn on
Monday, 2nd June 2014 @ 11:35:48 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
this is beautifully heartfelt! very sweet:)
hugs n' love nessa |
|
|
Re: Aurora
(User Rating: 1 )
by Invierno on
Tuesday, 3rd June 2014 @ 07:34:16 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
There is beauty in simplicity and you prove that here. There are a couple of lines that hint at a gift...
"When I am with you can feel my knees shake"
"you are my everything, my sparkling dime"
Perfect. Keep writing. Develop your talent please. You will be the richer for it.
Best,
Invierno |
|
|
Re: Aurora
(User Rating: 1 )
by softerware on
Wednesday, 4th June 2014 @ 03:41:21 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
You describe with impunity the blush of first love, and write in in the words of a young poet working his craft and his life in parallel.
I look forward to more of your life on these pages, and may you find empowerment from your experiences to bring us along on your journey! Your write takes me back to a sweeter time! Enjoy it! Once you have outgrown this moment, you can not go back. Commit it to paper, and someday you will read it with gentle longing, as many of us do now. Thank you for holding up the mirror!
softerware |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
