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I am the Fish
Contributed by
maluku
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Tuesday, 30th September 2014 @ 12:23:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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I am the fish
Strung-out upon a line that you did not cast
The hook still tearing at the very center of me
Does not weaken or rust
Drags back to you on a reel from a movie long finished
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maluku
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2014-09-30 12:23:15]
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Re: I am the Fish
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 30th September 2014 @ 02:28:23 PM AEST
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"I am ignorant of the rules of poetry". In my opinion, that is a great starting point. Don't get me wrong, not just any gibberish can make a poem...I think a desire to write your heart out is important, and trial and error is your best teacher. Rules have their place, but a true "poet" writes from the heart. A heart does not abide by rules. Ever.
Welcome to poetry, and welcome to YPDC :)
Your poem is perfect. Keep it up.
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Re: I am the Fish
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by RussellReinhardt on
Tuesday, 30th September 2014 @ 04:33:09 PM AEST
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Hi there
I agree. I was told the are no rules in poetry that may or may not be so. Yes sure its nice when poetry rhymes and flows but that comes with time and practice. My 1st ever poem is still top secret lol it was terrible. So good on you for your 1st post. Just write what you feel. I myself am not an intellectual writer I'm an emotional write. I see it I feel it I pen it. Simple. Don't stop writing. God bless
Greetings
Rus
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Re: I am the Fish
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 30th September 2014 @ 04:36:37 PM AEST
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First thing, I like your poem. The metaphor you have created is a good one.
I wanted to come on here and say something similar to hauntedscorp. So, I'll say this, I agree with her.
Do you think the great poets throughout history worried about rules? This is your poetry and write how you seem fit. Write like you want to, not like you feel you're supposed to.
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Re: I am the Fish
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 30th September 2014 @ 06:25:50 PM AEST
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it is beautiful and moving, i look forward to more from you, impressive first poem:)
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: I am the Fish
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by speedy on
Tuesday, 30th September 2014 @ 08:29:54 PM AEST
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My first poem had no real flow or puntuation; it was simply my thoughts on paper (& was written when I was 13). This was a great read. Good job!
Hannah B |
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