|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
Broken Man
Contributed by
maluku
on
Tuesday, 30th September 2014 @ 06:08:07 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
|
Lucidity erupts from deep within
Obtundent calm born of chagrin
Emotions scattered, an acidic dust
Now splintered heart begins to rust
Choked of dreams he needs to breath
A broken man is on his knees
Copyright ©
maluku
... [
2014-09-30 18:08:07]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: Broken Man
(User Rating: 1 )
by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 30th September 2014 @ 06:31:26 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
beautifully penned, excellent images, flow and style,
hugs n' love nessa |
|
|
Re: Broken Man
(User Rating: 1 )
by speedy on
Tuesday, 30th September 2014 @ 08:33:02 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Great write!
Hannah B |
|
|
Re: Broken Man
(User Rating: 1 )
by RussellReinhardt on
Tuesday, 30th September 2014 @ 11:57:31 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Yes love can make or brake anyone. Good write. God bless
Greetings
Rus |
|
|
Re: Broken Man
(User Rating: 1 )
by sanders on
Wednesday, 1st October 2014 @ 05:40:52 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
"A broken man on his knees"--great line....
Greetings |
|
|
Re: Broken Man
(User Rating: 1 )
by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 3rd October 2014 @ 03:23:06 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
I wouldn't call it an attempt so much as a triumph.
With the gift of eloquence you have fitted right in.
Nice write
Steve |
|
|
Re: Broken Man
(User Rating: 1 )
by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 4th October 2014 @ 09:39:49 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
I'm sure you meant "breathe", but that is a minor detail. Anytime a writer can convey such a strong emotive response in so few words, is a success. I daresay your metaphorical (or actual) pen has been chomping at the bit for years! Look at that thing explode...Wonderful stuff. Don't stop now!
~Scorp |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
